Just Plain Foolish

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Monday, August 20, 2007

Morning: One deep breath

Flat silver sun disk
Shines through soft grey morning fog
Dewdropped grass shivers

Waking birds chatter
Sweet hiccups of song echo
Among foggy trees

Coffee is brewing
Light drifts through city windows
But my quilt is warm...

Messy haired, groggy
I struggle to wake, need coffee.
Cheerful birds mock me.

Early morning dark
Daddy wakes me: come out back!
Watch raccoons steal trash

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Blogger Gerald (Ackworth born) said...

cheerful birds mock me

love that line!

8/20/2007 3:06 PM  
Blogger Clare said...

Wonderful images!! Each haiku is really nice -- and I love "dewdropped grass shivers" and "sweet hiccups of song echo/ among foggy trees".

8/21/2007 6:27 AM  
Blogger Crafty Green Poet said...

I'm going to echo Clare - I really like the hiccupping song.

8/21/2007 7:51 AM  
Blogger Unknown said...

These are all great--especially shivering grass and hiccuping and mocking birds.

8/21/2007 12:46 PM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Your last lines in order make a poem of their own:

"Dewdropped grass shivers
Among foggy trees
But my quilt is warm...
Cheerful birds mock me,
Watch raccoons steal trash"

I like each haiku, so many different morning images.

8/21/2007 9:08 PM  
Blogger Tumblewords: said...

sweet hiccups of song...really caught my attention! Nice work!

8/21/2007 9:46 PM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Since I have curly hair I thought it was "mossy haired" which would be me in the morning. All of these are so great. Marcia has it right you can mix and match the lines and they work.

8/22/2007 12:14 PM  
Blogger harmonyinline said...

I love the line " but my quilt is warm " it calls to me

8/22/2007 6:49 PM  
Blogger megan said...

these all show me morning! especially like the idea of dewdropped grass shivering.

8/22/2007 7:25 PM  
Blogger Patois42 said...

Oh, those sweet hiccups and the cheerful mocking birds are delights. I enjoyed all the poems. Nearly all describe bits of my mornings.

8/23/2007 10:39 AM  
Blogger Heartful said...

I love sweet hiccups of song.

8/23/2007 11:31 AM  
Blogger Plain Foolish said...

Thank you all. And Marcia, I really like the "last lines poem". Thank you.

My hair is wavy, rather than curly, but it's amazing the directions it can go first thing in the morning!

8/24/2007 6:57 AM  
Blogger Greggo said...

great series showing different aspects of morning-time! i love the line 'cheerful birds mock me'!

8/24/2007 6:58 AM  

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